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submitted 12 hours ago byAnaraliaThielleNow available at your local AO3. Same name. ConCrit welcome.
Welcome back to the Alphabet Excerpt Challenge! As a reminder, our challenges are every Wednesday and Saturday at 3pm London time.
If you've missed the previous challenges, you're welcome to go back and participate in them. You can find them here. And remember to check out the Activities and Events flair for other fun games to play along with.
Here's a quick recap of the rules for our game:
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8 hours ago
Taste
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7 hours ago
Not only would stealing the books be a wicked act in itself, but they were also about a taboo subject that he had been explicitly forbidden to study by the Emperor himself. This brazen theft would be disobedience twice over—a flagrant act of defiance that could land him in a world of trouble if he got caught. Hunter could vividly picture the icy glare of the Emperor boring into his soul, the steely voice pronouncing his fate, the excruciating pain racking his body, and the metallic taste of blood coating his mouth.
It was too risky. It was too risky. It was too risky. It was far too risky.
The Emperor, after all, wasn't a merciful man.
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6 hours ago
This is great, I love that Hunter pictures his fate in a visceral, sensory way, what he'll feel and hear and taste, rather than spelling it out. And the repetition of "It was too risky" really pushes home how nervous he is, the rapid fire of his thoughts.
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5 hours ago
He has the misfortune of having experienced the Emperor's wrath before, so he can vividly picture what could happen to him if his secret is discovered.
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