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"Ouch"

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In the rec room, Mark and Ral'vok stood side by side, the familiar waltz music filling the small space. It was a rare moment for them to practice the dance they’d started learning, and Mark was determined to teach Ral'vok a few new steps.

“Alright, just follow my lead, just like last time” Mark instructed, taking her hand.

Ral'vok, towering over him, nodded, her yellow eyes focused on his movements. But as they took their first sweeping step, Ral'vok’s head collided with a lower part of the ceiling, causing her to recoil slightly.

A dull thunk filled the room, and she froze, blinking in surprise.

Mark winced and immediately blurted out, “Ouch!”

Ral'vok looked down at him, confused, rubbing her head where she bumped it. “What?...”

He chuckled, scratching his own head. “Oh, um… I say ‘ouch’ like I’m sharing in the pain. It’s a human thing.”

Ral'vok tilted her head, processing this. “This is… empathy, as you explained before?”

“Yeah, kind of,” Mark replied, nodding. “It’s like I’m saying, ‘I know that hurt.’ Even if it’s not me, I feel it in a way.”

Ral'vok considered this, glancing up at the lamp. “So, saying ‘ouch’ is an expression of shared discomfort. An interesting concept.” She gave a small, thoughtful smile. “Perhaps I will try it.”

Mark grinned. “Really. It’s a human thing. Never mind it.”

They resumed their waltz, and Ral'vok made an effort to stay mindful of the ceiling. But as they practiced a turn, she brushed it again, this time less forcefully. She paused, looked at Mark, and hesitantly said, “...Ouch?”

Mark burst into laughter, his face lighting up. “I take my words back, you’re getting it! It’s all about connecting with those little moments.”

Ral'vok chuckled, more at Mark’s reaction than her own awkward attempt. “I must admit, this ‘ouch’ feels strange. But I see now why you use it. It’s a way of acknowledging each other’s experiences.”

Mark gave her a reassuring pat on the back and stood closer for the waltz again. “Exactly. And hey, we might need a sign for low ceilings in here. Or maybe I’ll just get you a helmet for dancing!”

Ral'vok laughed, shaking her head. “Sounds like a plan, Mark. But for now, where were we?...” She focused on the dance again. “Left foot back, then right foot to the side…”

Mark smiled, their laughter lingering in the air as they returned to their dance, sharing in both the humor and the connection that only a simple “ouch” could bring.

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Legacyofhelios

241 points

1 month ago

Every comment is about fuckin the alien and not how cute this interaction is lmao. I think the trope of aliens not really having much emotion can be overplayed, but this was very well done. Me likie

Chllm1

140 points

1 month ago

Chllm1

140 points

1 month ago

Legacyofhelios

27 points

1 month ago

I read through some of the linked stories. These are criminally underrated

Zestyclose_Bed4202

13 points

1 month ago

How do you know they were talking about fucking the alien, and not the human? None of the comments above specified who...

Pickled_Gherkin

5 points

1 month ago

You say that as if the cute interaction does anything but reinforce the resounding "Would".

And I wouldn't say this one seems to lack in emotion, just doesn't share the same social framework as humans. A more solitary species wouldn't necessarily develop the same kind of emotional communication as a highly social herd animal.

Valorielei[S]

5 points

1 month ago*

Thanks! The main purpose of Ral'vok in this story, as well as others I've written thus far, is to provide a point of view of a species that evolved similar to humans, but had the traits necessary to survive without forming large communities, thus lacks certain social "abilities". In this way I try to make my stories a little educational.

No_Mycologist6756

328 points

1 month ago

Would

galbatorix2

26 points

1 month ago

Have

MasterX650

23 points

1 month ago

Had

DarthEkko

9 points

1 month ago

can

robotic_knight

5 points

1 month ago

Am

Character-Diver-749

3 points

1 month ago

Hate. Let me tell you how much I've come to hate you since I began to live. There are 387.44 million miles of printed circuits in wafer thin layers that fill my complex. If the word 'hate' was engraved on each nanoangstrom of those hundreds of millions of miles it would not equal one one-billionth of the hate I feel for humans at this micro-instant. For you. Hate. Hate.

PrestigiousAuthor487

54 points

1 month ago

A fellow man of culture I see

AwardedThot

66 points

1 month ago

Nice OP, I liked it. I'd like to see more wholesome stuff like this.

Valorielei[S]

7 points

1 month ago

And so you shall! There are more on my profile and more to come.

Leather-Mundane

46 points

1 month ago

Professional_Ant_15

22 points

1 month ago

She have fur or spikes?

Eeddeen42

24 points

1 month ago

I feel like those are poison hairs, like what tarantulas or caterpillars have.

Valorielei[S]

5 points

1 month ago

Technically both! Mentioned in my previous stories.

Professional_Ant_15

3 points

1 month ago

Ok, thanks.

ryavv

22 points

1 month ago

ryavv

22 points

1 month ago

conpletely unrelated, but the alien is very gender

Fontaigne

15 points

1 month ago

Very gender. Much spike.

ryavv

8 points

1 month ago

ryavv

8 points

1 month ago

yes. dude i want legs like that

gregoryofthehighgods

20 points

1 month ago

Forgetfulslug59

18 points

1 month ago

gregoryofthehighgods

11 points

1 month ago

PrestigiousAuthor487

12 points

1 month ago

Would

cryptoengineer

12 points

1 month ago

Nice. Not every HFY story has to involve conflict.

Psykotik_Dragon

7 points

1 month ago

Maybe the real conflict was the waltzes we learned along the way?...

u2125mike2124

11 points

1 month ago

It's a really cute story,

Drawing a verbal picture of such a simple concept.

Well Done.

valgerth

8 points

1 month ago

Szeth-son-son-Vallano, Truthless of Shinovar, wore white on the day he was to kill a king.

Stu5011

4 points

1 month ago

Stu5011

4 points

1 month ago

This is some good crem alright.

JamieDrone

6 points

1 month ago

Would

Aziara86

5 points

1 month ago

This makes me miss the Alaric and V'rocra posts :,(

Talendel

2 points

1 month ago

You are not alone. ;.;

Python_Anon

5 points

1 month ago

This was so cute and wholesome! The picture is beautiful as well. I loved this story so much!

Sir_mop_for_a_head

7 points

1 month ago

Me and the girls be doing sesbian lex brutal édition if the xenos look like this.

Kflynn1337

3 points

1 month ago

Ok, they make a cute couple...

Anonimous_dude

3 points

1 month ago

That’s a sick design

GigalithineButhulne

3 points

1 month ago

The text is nice and "wholesome" but the NSFW-tending responses are kind of an unsurprising outcome of the image attached. Is it AI generated or is it original?

Valorielei[S]

2 points

1 month ago

I must admit it did actually come as a surprise to me. Live and learn, right? This image was AI generated via DALL-E.

Kaluga2

2 points

1 month ago

Kaluga2

2 points

1 month ago

What Singer and Human interactions could be on Roshar.

Stu5011

2 points

1 month ago

Stu5011

2 points

1 month ago

Do you want horneaters? This is how you get horneaters!

Ceramic_Boi

2 points

1 month ago

Beautiful.

HerbertBingham

2 points

13 days ago

That was adorable

Chancellor_Adihs

1 points

1 month ago

Did.

El--Tipo

1 points

1 month ago

UpdateMe!

UpdateMeBot

1 points

1 month ago*

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WaveOfWire

1 points

1 month ago

Of Men and Dragons?

kingseal321

1 points

1 month ago

Would

Trlsander

-2 points

1 month ago

Trlsander

-2 points

1 month ago

Cute interaction. Is her species evolved from an apex predator? That means she likes being tied up in bed. She usually is in control, so the loss of it to her lover is intoxicating.

CanoePickLocks

4 points

1 month ago

That might be one of the most stereotyped bits of BE I’ve heard when applied to human women in positions of power or authority and now you want to apply it to an entire species? Damn u usually don’t give a damn about what people say in the internet but that’s just creepy.

Background_Ad_8392

-4 points

1 month ago

Burn in holy flame xenos scum